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作者:孟安然 发布日期:2020-03-02 点击数:204

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[2014年高考江苏卷作文题目]

根据以下材料,选取角度,自拟题目,写一篇不少于800字的文章;文体不限,诗歌除外。

有人说,没有什么是不朽的,只有青春是不朽的。也有人说,青年人不相信有朝一日会老去,这种感觉其实是天真的,我们自欺欺人地抱有一种像自然一

样长存不朽的信念。

朽叶的栀子花

小城深处有条老巷。明晃晃黄醺醺的光蔓延一路,点亮了一个城市的古老温情。

相熟的板车,彼伏的吆呵,一路的葱蒜,噼噼叭叭的煎油声,勾着所有途经的味蕾,而女人的店也在其中。

女人是卖锅贴的。煎到外酥里嫩,香气四溢,搁到蓝印花的小碟中,浇一层香醋,撒一圈葱花,待到轻咬一口,却是意料之外的香甜之感,隐隐间又有些青春独有的青涩。

在旁人眼里,女人不过是个有些瘦削的老太太,可我只想用“女人”这个含着少女的甜蜜和妇人的成熟的代称。女人爱美,每次见她,总是抹了脂粉搽了口红,似乎想留下青春的最后一点尾巴。女人爱笑,笑起来眼角会轻轻颤颤,不招不摇,温婉而妥帖。煎锅贴时,她总是打扮得一丝不苟,有点“盛装端热油”的味道,远远看去竟像是从《蒹葭》里走出的那位如水女子。

我迷惑于女人身上青春娇美端方的气息,沉迷于女人手下青涩而有些甜蜜的锅贴。恰巧,女人是我同学的祖母,一经询问,方知锅贴里藏着栀子和苹果混合的酱料。而女人原是那个十里洋场的大户之女,几经辗转方暂栖于这个闭塞的小城,操持着祖业依然优雅地活着。

一时间,我心中充溢着难以言说的震惊和恍然。震惊于加花酱的匠心,恍然于女人身上的不朽之气。一个会在锅贴里加花酱的女子,岂会敌不过时光的蹉跎?当岁月爬上她的鬓角,风霜侵蚀她的容颜,她依然爱着美,爱着生活,像年轻时一样雅致而细腻,如此,岂会老去?

时常去女人的小摊,站在一边我不语,女人亦不言。我呆呆看她熟练地翻煎,温婉地浅笑,不卑地招呼,沉溺于女人那一汪如碧水般的不朽之气里。夕阳西下,女人美得如一幅古仕女图。

我时常迷惑于青春与不朽。以为青春必是光洁明艳,不朽必是巍巍如高山之巅,仰不可攀。然而,看到女人身上混杂着与年龄不符的青春之气,我方有些体悟。有时候,心的柔软与细腻远胜过形貌。没有人活在保鲜膜中,没有人会永葆青春,但做一个心思细腻、热爱生活的人,时光永远会厚爱你几分;而如此,何尝不是另一种静水流深的不朽?

想起女人,就想起一枝搁在蓝印花碟中的带露栀子。或许叶子些许腐朽,但花瓣仍是一如既往地柔软。

专家点评

本文的特点在于温婉细腻,直击人心。一朵花,一个比喻。一个人,一个命题。构思精致、独到,引人入胜。

生活化是本文的另一个特色,古老的街巷,美味的锅贴,温婉雅致的老板娘,每一处刻画都真实传神。

当然,文章也有瑕疵。比如对词语的使用显得有些随心所欲,“相熟的板车,彼伏的吆呵”,“相熟”和“彼伏”这样的词语就属于生编硬造。不过我们有理由相信,在经过必要的训练以后,这样的毛病一定可以克服。 



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